Let me show you this table. It gives information about how different reasons for conflicts between teenagers and their parents are.
As can be seen from the graph, the largest percentage of motive for disputes is TV/computer/mobile phone overuse. Modern teens are addicted to gadgets, which makes parents worried about consequences of such activities. However, it is necessary to emphasize that parents do not want to interfere with their children's choice of friends or hobbies because such aspects reflect adolecsents’ tastes and help them to prove themselves. This is the reason why quarrels related to selection of mates and hobbies are only 16%.
From the statistics it can be inferred that there is not a big difference between the frequency of appearing of reasons corresponding to the middle of the table. Such causes of rows as a lack of discipline and not helping about the house represent the average value and differ from one another by 2%.
I want to say that there is a problem that can arise with a negative atmosphere in the family. I suppose, bad relationship with close relatives can make kids grown away from their parents. To solve this problem every town should carry out events devoted to remaining family traditions and embraced every family.
All in all, I want to say that the role of the family in teenagers' lives is significant because family members are the only ones who can have sympathy for teens' problems sincerely and give the proper advice.
52%
lack of discipline
30%
academic performance
28%
not helping about the house
22%
choice of hobbies and friends
16%
Write 200-250 words.
Use the following plan:
- make an opening statement on the subject of the project work;
- select and report 2–3 main features;
- make 1-2 comparisons where relevant;
outline a problem that can arise with a negative atmosphere in the family and suggest the way of
solving it;
- draw a conclusion giving your personal opinion on the role of the family in teenagers' lives.
К1– 2 балла
В работе раскрыты почти все аспекты, но есть неточности, в том числе связанные с предложениями решения проблем.
Если автор заявляет, что «As can be seen from the graph, the largest percentage of motive for disputes is TV/computer/mobile phone overusе», то одно из решений должно быть направлено на решение непосредственно этой проблемы, исходя из ее специфики. Семейные традции – неплохой вариант, но если он единственный, то стоит на нем остановиться поподробнее или сделать упор на том, что в них исправит ситуацию.
Вывод из третьего абзаца можно дополнить, как это правильно сделал автор во втором: к примеру, родителям не так важны бытовые обязанности детей, как их времяпровождение.
В остальном все в порядке, стилевое оформление тоже правильное.
К2 – 3 балла
Текст неплохо организован, разбит на абзацы. Средства связи активно используются, повествование последовательно.
К3 –3 балла
Лексических ошибок не обнаружено.
К4– 2 балл
Пропустили артикль: consequences, selection
Неправильно написанное слово: adolecsents’
Неправильное число: bad relationship
К5– 1 балл
Пропущена запятая: statistics it can be, To solve this problem
Лишняя запятая: suppose, bad
Итого: 11 баллов