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Residential areas are the best places to live for families with children (Сочинения ЕГЭ английский язык)

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There is a popular opinion that housing area is a perfect living place for parents with kids. At the same time, some people claim that it is better to reside in a center of a city because there are lots of opportunities for spending family time. Now I want to express my point of view on this issue.

I strongly believe that it is more advantages than disadvantages of living in a residential quarter. First of all, it is good for people’s health because families are far from industrial zones and noise of traffic jams. It means that fresh air and a low level of pollution will definitely increase one’s wellbeing. Secondly, the most important aspect of living in this territory is no crime because safety of children is above all.

According to statics, life in a residential district is calm and without accidents.

However, my opponents think that for most people living in a center of a city is more convenient. In their view, there is a varied choice of having fun with children and spending free time because people can visit different shopping malls and clubs.

Personally, I do not agree with the above-mentioned opinion. I am convinced that residential areas offer good opportunities for spending family time because there are some parks which are more suitable for children than wasting time in shops.

In conclusion, I would like to stress that there are many benefts of living in such places located far from business and industry areas because it is safer and healthier for children.

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К1 - содержание.Аргументы, контраргументы, опровержение приведены. Стиль соблюден.

К2 - организация.Эссе построено логически верно.

К3 - лексика.

safety of children is above all(русицизм!)

life in a residential district is calm and without accidents(лучше has no accidents. иначе предложение тяжело воспринимается)

safer and healthier for children.(healthy может быть человек)

К4 - грамматика.

it is more advantages than disadvantages(there are more...)

for most people living in a center of a city is more convenient living in a center of a city is more convenient for most people)

К5 - орфография и пунктуация.

center(centre)

center(centre) (дважды)

benefts (benefits)

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К2-3

К3-2

К4-3

К5-1

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