40. It would be better to have only one language on our planet (Ñî÷èíåíèÿ ÅÃÝ àíãëèéñêèé ÿçûê)

Ê1 (ðåøåíèå êîììóíèêàòèâíîé çàäà÷è) – 3 áàëëà

Êîììóíèêàòèâíàÿ çàäà÷à ðåøåíà.

Ê2 (îðãàíèçàöèÿ òåêñòà) – 2 áàëëà

Çàìå÷àíèå êàñàåòñÿ ëîãèêè ïîñòðîåíèÿ ñëåäóþùåãî ôðàãìåíòà:

First of all, would be easier for teenagers studying, they did not need learn other languages. Secondly, would be easier for people.

Ïðîòèâîïîñòàâëåíèå ìîëîä¸æè ëþäÿì íåïðàâîìåðíî, ïîñêîëüêó êàòåãîðèÿ ïîñëåäíèõ ïî îïðåäåëåíèþ âêëþ÷àåò ïåðâûõ. Ïîýòîìó ñëåäîâàëî áû ñêàçàòü, ê ïðèìåðó, people in general.

Ê3 (ëåêñèêà) – 1 áàëë

1) Îáðàùàåò íà ñåáÿ âíèìàíèå îòíîñèòåëüíàÿ áåäíîñòü ñëîâàðíîãî çàïàñà. Òàê, èç 242 ñëîâ ñî÷èíåíèÿ 25 óïîòðåáëåíèé (ò.å. áîëåå 10%) ïðèõîäÿòñÿ âñåãî íà òðè ñëîâà: language, people è better. Äóìàåòñÿ, ÷òî ñëåäóåò àêòèâíåå èñïîëüçîâàòü ñèíîíèìû è ñòàðàòüñÿ ïðèâíåñòè â ëåêñè÷åñêèé ñîñòàâ ýññå áîëüøå ðàçíîîáðàçèÿ.

2) without hard – without difficulty [Íåâåðíî âûáðàíî ñëîâî];

3) decide different problems – solve different problems [Ñëîâî decide èìååò çíà÷åíèå «ïðèíÿòü ðåøåíèå», à íå «ðåøèòü ïðîáëåìó»];

4) I do not believe with the opposite opinion – I do not agree with the opposite opinion [Ãëàãîë believe äåëàåò ôðàãìåíò ïðåäëîæåíèÿ áåññìûñëåííûì];

5) other sciences – other disciplines/subjects [Ðå÷ü â ïðåäëîæåíèè èä¸ò ñíà÷àëà î languages, ïîýòîìó ôðàçîé other sciences àâòîð êàê áóäòî áû ïðèçíà¸ò ÿçûê íàóêîé, òîãäà êàê åãî ñëåäóåò îáîçíà÷èòü ñêîðåå êàê äèñöèïëèíó èëè ïðåäìåò];

6) decide their problems – solve their problems [Ñì. ïóíêò 3].

Ê4 (ãðàììàòèêà) – 0 áàëëîâ

 ñî÷èíåíèè èìååòñÿ î÷åíü áîëüøîå êîëè÷åñòâî ãðàììàòè÷åñêèõ îøèáîê, êîòîðûå çàòðóäíÿþò âîñïðèÿòèå òåêñòà.

1) One of them believe – Some of them believe [Âûðàæåíèå one of them îçíà÷àåò «îäèí èç íèõ»];

2) one language would be better – one language, it would be better [Ïðîïóùåíî ïîäëåæàùåå it];

3) other one think – others think [Èñõîäíîå âûðàæåíèå íåâåðíî];

4) interesting having just one language – interesting to have just one language [Òðåáóåòñÿ èíôèíèòèâ];

5) opinion, would be – opinion, it would be [Ïðîïóùåíî ïîäëåæàùåå it];

6) better have just one language – better to have just one language [Ïðîïóùåíà èíôèíèòèâíàÿ ÷àñòèöà to];

7) all, would be easier – all, it would be easier [Ïðîïóùåíî ïîäëåæàùåå it];

8) easier for teenagers studying – easier for teenagers to study [Òðåáóåòñÿ èíôèíèòèâ];

9) they did not need learn – they would not need to learn [Íåâåðíî ïîñòðîåíà ñîñëàãàòåëüíàÿ êîíñòðóêöèÿ];

10) Secondly, would be easier – Secondly, it would be easier [Ïðîïóùåíî ïîäëåæàùåå it];

11) better working of them – their better work [Èñõîäíàÿ ôðàçà íå èñïîëüçóåòñÿ â àíãëèéñêîì, ò.ê. âûãëÿäèò íåóêëþæå];

12) not just language determines – it is not just language that determines [Òðåáóåòñÿ äîáàâëåíèå âñïîìîãàòåëüíûõ ýëåìåíòîâ äëÿ ïîñòðîåíèÿ óñèëèòåëüíîé êîíñòðóêöèè];

13) their problems faster and easier – their problems faster and more easily [Íàðå÷èå easily èìååò èìåííî òàêóþ ñðàâíèòåëüíóþ ñòåïåíü].

Ê5 (îðôîãðàôèÿ è ïóíêòóàöèÿ) – 0 áàëëîâ

1) other less – others – less [Ïîñêîëüêó èìååò ìåñòî íàìåðåííîå îïóùåíèå ñëîâ, ñëåäóåò ïîñòàâèòü òèðå, êîòîðîå èõ çàìåùàåò];

2) just one language would be better – just one language, it would be better [Ïðèäàòî÷íîå ñ if, ñòîÿùåå ïåðåä ãëàâíûì, îòäåëÿåòñÿ çàïÿòîé];

3) for all, other one think – for all. Others think / for all, while others think [Ñëåäóåò ïåðåäåëàòü ôðàãìåíò îäíèì èç óêàçàííûõ ñïîñîáîâ];

4) new languages but it is really important – new languages, but it is really important [Òðåáóåòñÿ çàïÿòàÿ];

5) for their brains they – for their brains, they [Ñì. ïóíêò 2];

6) In conclusion I would like – In conclusion, I would like [Òðåáóåòñÿ çàïÿòàÿ ïîñëå ââîäíîé êîíñòðóêöèè].