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40. Some people think that extreme sports help to build character (Ñî÷èíåíèÿ ÅÃÝ àíãëèéñêèé ÿçûê)

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Nowadays extreme sports have become more and more popular. Some people think these kinds of sport can help to build character. Others believe that there are other methods that make character forceful.

In my opinion, there are many ways to build character. First of all, doing science can help to become more responsible because scientific experiments require a lot of attention, accurate calculations.

Secondly, another way to build character is to do charity work. Kindness, tenderness are deliberately cultivated by charity. Lastly, reading books contributes to the building character. It is the most valuable single tool used to gain knowledge and learn how to be kindhearted, brave and strong.

Nevertheless, some people think that extreme kinds of sport can build character. On the one hand, it teaches to achieve your goals, trains willpower. When a person climbs a rock, he makes effort to get to the top. On the other hand, extreme sports make people be responsive, ready to help. For example, during a river rafting trip, a person's life depends on his friend. If something happens, he should be self-disciplined and provide first aid.

However, I cannot agree with the above opinion. Some people can't afford to do extreme sports because of health problems. However, it does not mean that they cannot cultivate willpower in another way. Moreover, even the most seasoned person can get lost in a difficult situation.

In conclusion, I would like to say that tastes differ. However, I think that not only extreme sports can help to build character.

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1)  ïåðâîì àáçàöå íåâåðíî çàâÿëåíà ïðîòèâîïîëîæíàÿ ïîçèöèÿ – àâòîð ëèøü êîíñòàòèðóåò ôàêò íàëè÷èÿ àëüòåðíàòèâíûõ ýêñòðåìàëüíîìó ñïîðòó ïóòåé ôîðìèðîâàíèÿ õàðàêòåðà. Îäíàêî ýòî óòâåðæäåíèå íàñòîëüêî î÷åâèäíî, ÷òî ïî ñóòè íå íåñ¸ò íèêàêîé ñìûñëîâîé íàãðóçêè. Íà ñàìîì äåëå ïðîòèâîïîëîæíàÿ òî÷êà çðåíèÿ äîëæíà ñîñòîÿòü â òîì, ÷òî ýêñòðåìàëüíûå âèäû ñïîðòà íå ìîãóò ïîìî÷ü â ôîðìèðîâàíèè õàðàêòåðà.

2) Íåâåðíî ïîñòðîåííîå ïðîòèâîïîñòàâëåíèå òî÷åê çðåíèÿ ïðèâåëî àâòîðà ê òîìó, ÷òî âåñü âòîðîé àáçàö ñòàë îäíèì áîëüøèì îòñòóïëåíèåì îò òåìû. Ýòî çàìåòíî õîòÿ áû óæå èç òîãî, ÷òî â ýòîì àáçàöå íè ñëîâà íå ãîâîðèòñÿ î ñïîðòå è åãî ýêñòðåìàëüíûõ ðàçíîâèäíîñòÿõ. Âìåñòî ýòîãî âûïóñêíèê ðàññóæäàåò î íàóêå, áëàãîòâîðèòåëüíîñòè è ÷òåíèè ëèòåðàòóðû.

3) Òðåòèé àáçàö íàïèñàí îòíîñèòåëüíî êîððåêòíî, íî òàêæå íå áåç íåäîñòàòêîâ.  ÷àñòíîñòè, ïîëîæåíèå î äîñòèæåíèè öåëåé è òðåíèðîâêå ñèëû âîëè ïðèìåíèìî êî âñåìó ñïîðòó â öåëîì, à íå òîëüêî ê åãî ýêñòðåìàëüíûì ðàçíîâèäíîñòÿì.

4)  ÷åòâ¸ðòîì æå àáçàöå àâòîð âíîâü óõîäèò îò çàäàííîé òåìàòèêè. Òàê, îí ðàññóæäàåò î íåñïîñîáíîñòè íåêîòîðûõ ëþäåé ïîçâîëèòü ñåáå çàíÿòèÿ ýêñòðåìàëüíûì ñïîðòîì èç-çà ïðîáëåì ñî çäîðîâüåì, à òàêæå î òîì, ÷òî äàæå ñàìûé îïûòíûé ñïîðòñìåí ìîæåò ïîïàñòü â ñëîæíóþ ñèòóàöèþ. Íåñëîæíî ïîíÿòü, ÷òî äàííûå àðãóìåíòû íå çàòðàãèâàþò ñóùíîñòü ïðîáëåìû è ïîýòîìó íèêîèì îáðàçîì íå îïðîâåðãàþò ïðîòèâîïîëîæíóþ ïîçèöèþ.

5) Íàêîíåö, íåóáåäèòåëüíî ñôîðìóëèðîâàíî è çàêëþ÷åíèå ýññå.  êà÷åñòâå îñíîâíîãî âûâîäà àâòîð âûíîñèò óòâåðæäåíèå î ðàçëè÷èÿõ âî âêóñàõ. Ëèøü çàòåì óïîìèíàþòñÿ ýêñòðåìàëüíûå âèäû ñïîðòà, ïðè÷¸ì ñíîâà â èñêàæ¸ííîì ïî ñìûñëó êîíòåêñòå, êîòîðûé ïîâòîðÿåò îøèáêó ïåðâîãî è âòîðîãî àáçàöåâ.

6) Ôîðìà can't íàðóøàåò íåéòðàëüíóþ ñòèëåâóþ îðãàíèçàöèþ ñî÷èíåíèÿ.

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