Ñ÷àñòëèâîãî íîâîãî ãîäà îò êðèòèêè24.ðó êðèòèêà24.ðó
Âåðíûé ïîìîùíèê!

ÐÅÃÈÑÒÐÀÖÈß
  âõîä

Âõîä ÷åðåç VK
çàáûëè ïàðîëü?

Ïðîâåðêà ñî÷èíåíèé
Çàêàçàòü ñî÷èíåíèå




ÏÎÈÑÊ:

Ó íàñ áîëåå 100 000 ìàòåðèàëîâ âîñïîëüçóéòåñü ïîèñêîì! Âàì ïîâåç¸ò!

40. In any occupation discipline is more important than talent (Ñî÷èíåíèÿ ÅÃÝ àíãëèéñêèé ÿçûê)

0 èç 14
Îöåíêà ýêñïåðòà âíèçó

Sometimes when you work you can hear a phrase like «in any occupation discipline is more important than talent». And you think that if you want to achieve success you should be more disciplined.

ut is it a truth? Do you really believe that if you have a good discipline you will be a good painter without having a talent?

I strongly believe that it is an invalid statement. And i have some arguments for it. To start with, I want to say that if a person doesn’t have a talent he will not be able to create a really good thing.

For example, a person can’t create a sculpture without a talent under the guidance of another person. Secondly, what is about situation when you haven’t got a director? Discipline can’t help you if you haven’t got a talent.

For another hand, in some areas where you shouldn’t have a big talent to do your work well a discipline can effect on your work a lot.

ut I think that this opposing statement is just an exception. It is true only for single case but not in global understanding of problem. That is why it can’t influence on my opinion.

In conclusion I want to say that in any occupation people should have a talent and he will be able to create something wonderful and unique.

Îáíîâëåíî:
Îïóáëèêîâàë(à):
Îöåíêà ýêñïåðòà:

Ê1 (ðåøåíèå êîììóíèêàòèâíîé çàäà÷è) – 0 áàëëîâ

1) Ââîäíûé àáçàö ïîñòðîåí íåâåðíî – âìåñòî äåìîíñòðàöèè äâóõ ïðîòèâîïîëîæíûõ òî÷åê çðåíèÿ ïî ïðîáëåìå àâòîð èñïîëüçóåò âîïðîñèòåëüíûå ïðåäëîæåíèÿ, îáðàùàÿñü ê ÷èòàòåëþ. Äàííûå âîïðîñèòåëüíûå ïðåäëîæåíèÿ íå íåñóò çíà÷èòåëüíîé ñìûñëîâîé íàãðóçêè è íå ñïîñîáñòâóþò ðåøåíèþ êîììóíèêàòèâíîé çàäà÷è.

2) Àðãóìåíòû àâòîðà íåñîñòîÿòåëüíû – òàê, íàïðèìåð, íå ïîÿñíÿåòñÿ, ïî÷åìó íåâîçìîæíî ñîçäàòü ñêóëüïòóðó ïîä ðóêîâîäñòâîì íàñòàâíèêà, ïóñòü äàæå è íå èìåÿ îñîáîãî òàëàíòà. ×òî êàñàåòñÿ îòñóòñòâèÿ äèðåêòîðà, òî â äàííîì ñëó÷àå äèñöèïëèíà ÷àñòî åù¸ áîëåå âàæíà, ïîñêîëüêó ÷åëîâåê ñòàíîâèòñÿ äèðåêòîðîì ñàì ñåáå.

3)  òðåòüåì è ÷åòâ¸ðòîì àáçàöàõ íå ñîäåðæèòñÿ íèêàêîé êîíêðåòèêè, ò.ê. âûïóñêíèê íå ïðèâîäèò ïðèìåðû ñôåð äåÿòåëüíîñòè, â êîòîðûõ äèñöèïëèíà âàæíåå òàëàíòà.

4) Îáðàùàåò íà ñåáÿ âíèìàíèå îáèëèå îòêëîíåíèé îò íåéòðàëüíîãî ñòèëÿ: àâòîð àêòèâíî èñïîëüçóåò âîïðîñèòåëüíûå ïðåäëîæåíèÿ è ñîêðàù¸ííûå ôîðìû: â òåêñòå íàñ÷èòûâàåòñÿ òðè âîïðîñà è ñåìü ñîêðàùåíèé.

5)  öåëîì æå òåêñò ïåðåïîëíåí ëåêñè÷åñêèìè, ãðàììàòè÷åñêèìè, îðôîãðàôè÷åñêèìè è ïóíêòóàöèîííûìè îøèáêàìè, à òàêæå íåêîððåêòíî ïîñòðîåí â ïëàíå àáçàöíîãî ÷ëåíåíèÿ. Âñ¸ ýòî çàòðóäíÿåò ïîíèìàíèå ñìûñëà ýññå.

Ó÷èòûâàÿ ïåðå÷èñëåííûå çàìå÷àíèÿ, êîììóíèêàòèâíóþ çàäà÷ó ñ÷èòàòü ðåø¸ííîé íåëüçÿ. Ñî÷èíåíèå ïîëó÷àåò íîëü áàëëîâ.

Íàøè ýêñïåðòû ìîãóò ïðîâåðèòü Âàøå ñî÷èíåíèå ïî êðèòåðèÿì ÅÃÝ
ÎÒÏÐÀÂÈÒÜ ÍÀ ÏÐÎÂÅÐÊÓ

Ýêñïåðòû ñàéòà Êðèòèêà24.ðó
Ó÷èòåëÿ âåäóùèõ øêîë è äåéñòâóþùèå ýêñïåðòû Ìèíèñòåðñòâà ïðîñâåùåíèÿ Ðîññèéñêîé Ôåäåðàöèè.


Âíèìàíèå!
Åñëè Âû çàìåòèëè îøèáêó èëè îïå÷àòêó, âûäåëèòå òåêñò è íàæìèòå Ctrl+Enter.
Òåì ñàìûì îêàæåòå íåîöåíèìóþ ïîëüçó ïðîåêòó è äðóãèì ÷èòàòåëÿì.

Ñïàñèáî çà âíèìàíèå.

.


ÐÅÃÈÑÒÐÀÖÈß
  âõîä

Âõîä ÷åðåç VK
çàáûëè ïàðîëü?

Ïðîâåðêà ñî÷èíåíèé
Çàêàçàòü ñî÷èíåíèå