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University education is essential for young people; Future profession (—очинени€ ≈√Ё английский €зык)

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Nowadays university education is a controversial topic for discussions. Some people think university education is not important because students can find all information in the Internet. However, others suppose it is necessary to attend university and get classical education for teenagers.

To my mind, university degree is still important today. Firstly, students can communicate with professors to ask them about difficulties with their specialization or find new friend among students who will inspire to do their best during studying. Secondly, university education offers hard schedule, so it is no time for useless thing and lying in the bed.

Young people always have to meet deadlines. It improves their discipline and responsibility.

On the other hand, there are many new professions which are not taught in the university or study-program is too old. Secondly, self-education offers flexible schedule, so students do not stressed and have time to rest or repeat difficult topics.

Nevertheless, students who degreed from the university have diploma and can easily find good job, while self-education is still useless for employers. So, it is better to study related subjects in the university then buy online courses. Secondly, flexible plan of education fits only self-discipline students.

To sum up, I might stress that university education is still important. However, everyone can use Internet for self-studying in addition to the classical studying.

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«адание 39 Ц 5 баллов

 1 (решение коммуникативной задачи) Ц 2 балла

ѕоставленна€ коммуникативна€ задача решена в полной мере.

 2 (организаци€ текста) Ц 2 балла

ќрганизаци€ текста соответствует всем основным требовани€м.

 3 (€зыковое оформление текста) Ц 1 балл

1) I have already decided on my career in the eighth grade [Ќекорректно использована форма времени Ц поскольку имеетс€ указание на точный момент совершени€ действи€, следует заменить have decided (Present Perfect) на decided (Past Simple)];

2) I like study-process and explain difficult topics easier [»з-за несколько сумбурной грамматической организации не до конца €сен смысл предложени€. ћожно предложить такой вариант перефразировани€: I enjoy the teaching process and like to explain difficult topics in a simple way];

3) What country you want to visit at first? [Ќарушена структура вопросительного предложени€. Ќекорректно использовано выражение at first. ¬ариант исправлени€: What country do you want to visit first?];

4) Why you donТt want travel through the USA? [Ќарушена структура вопросительного предложени€. ѕропущена частица to после глагола want. ¬ариант исправлени€: Why don't you want to travel through/in the USA?].

«адание 40 Ц 8 баллов

 1 (решение коммуникативной задачи) Ц 3 балла

“ема раскрыта с соблюдением всех ключевых требований.

 2 (организаци€ текста) Ц 3 балла

“екст выстроен логично и хорошо структурирован.

 3 (лексика) Ц 0 баллов

1) in the Internet Ц on the Internet [“ребуетс€ использование предлога on];

2) difficulties with their specialization Ц difficulties connected/associated with their specialization [Ѕез уточнени€ фрагмент выгл€дит неполным и не€сным];

3) repeat difficult topics Ц revise difficult topics [—лово repeat подразумевает механическое воспроизведение ранее сказанного/написанного, а не повторение учебного материала];

4) degreed from the university Ц graduated from university [—лово degree не используетс€ в данном значении и не выступает как глагол];

5) then buy online courses Ц than buy online courses;

6) plan of education fits only self-discipline students Ц plan of education is suitable for self-disciplined students only.

 4 (грамматика) Ц 0 баллов

1) it is necessary to attend university and get classical education for teenagers Ц it is necessary for teenagers to attend university and get classical education [Ќеобходимо перестроить конструкцию];

2) university degree is still important Ц a university degree is still important [“ребуетс€ артикль];

3) find new friend Ц find new friends;

4) who will inspire to do their best Ц who will inspire them to do their best [Ќеобходимо дополнение];

5) offers hard schedule Ц offers a hard schedule [“ребуетс€ артикль];

6) so it is no time for useless thing and lying in the bed Ц so there is no time for useless things and lying in bed [ онструкци€ there is. ћножественное число things. ”стойчива фраза lying in bed];

7) there are many new professions which are not taught in the university or study-program is too old Ц there are many new professions which are not taught at university and a lot of out-of-date programmes [‘раза at university. ѕерефразирование конца предложени€];

8) offers flexible schedule Ц offers a flexible schedule [“ребуетс€ артикль];

9) students do not stressed Ц students do not get stressed [ѕропущен лексико-грамматический элемент get];

10) students who degreed from the university have diploma and can easily find good job Ц students who graduated from university have diplomas and can easily find a good job [—лово university без артикл€. Diplomas во множественном числе. јртикль перед словом job];

11) flexible plan Ц a flexible plan [“ребуетс€ артикль].

 5 (орфографи€ и пунктуаци€) Ц 2 балла

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