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Studying online is more interesting than studying at school пример 2 (Сочинения ЕГЭ английский язык)

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Some people claim that homeschooling is a great way to receive education, others have an opposite point of view. Let us examine this problem more closely.

In my opinion, studying online is not the best way for students to get educated. Firstly, students who study online suffer from face-to-face communication and become unsociable. Secondly, there are a lot of sport, IT and art clubs at schools, so homeschooled students do not have an opportunity to attend them. Thirdly, students who study online do not have a chance to ask a teacher about some problems with homework or other tasks.

However, not all people share my point of view. They say that homeschooled students have a lot of free time, so they can spend it on their hobbies and interests. Moreover, students who study online can concentrate on their favorite subjects and spend less time on lessons witch they cannot stand.

I am afraid, I cannot agree with the above mentioned statement, as homeschooled students who have a lot of free time can waste it in bad companies, drink alcoholic beverages and smoke. Furthermore, pupils who study online do not pay attention to subjects they do not like even if they are compulsory.

Taking into consideration all mentioned above, I am convinced that online education makes teenagers less communicative and less educated.

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К1 - содержание.

Аспект 6 - заключение не распространено.

К2 - организация.Эссе построено логически верно.

К3 - лексика.

receive education(get education)

suffer from face-to-face communication(страдают??)

bad companies(groups)

К4 - грамматика.

get educated(get education/be educated)

К5 - орфография и пунктуация.

students have a lot of free time, so they can...(students have a lot of free time. So they can...)

favorite (favourite)

witch(which)

К1-2

К2-3

К3-2

К4-3

К5-1

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