Nowadays studying online is getting popular. Many people tend to think that studying at school is boring and there are a lot of alternatives to it on the Internet but others do not agree claiming that traditional studying at school is better.
Personally, I consider that learning online has many advantages. Firstly, studying online allow people plan their day themselves. Secondly, students can choose teachers who are smart and enough for them. And thirdly, studying online has a lot exciting functions such as watching short videos, playing games and so on.
However, some people suppose that studying online is boring because students cannot communicate with each other. Moreover, students need to sit at home and do homework.
Nevertheless, I do not agree with them because students can chat and call each other using social media and video services like Skype and Zoom. Students can go for a walk as always. They do not need to sit at school and they can study in comfortable place.
To sum up, though there are two points of view on studying, I think that studying online has more exciting functions than studying at school.
К1 - содержание.
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К2 - организация. Эссе построено логически верно.
К3 - лексика.
students can choose teachers who are smart and enough for them.(not enough, but suitable)
go for a walk as always(As usually)
К4 - грамматика.
studying online allow(Allows)
studying online allow people plan(TO plan)
К5 - орфография и пунктуация.
Many people tend to think that studying at school is boring and there are a lot of alternatives to it on the Internet but others do not agree(Нужна запятая перед but, так как это две части сложного предложения)
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