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The duty of governments is to protect the environment example (Ñî÷èíåíèÿ ÅÃÝ àíãëèéñêèé ÿçûê)

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Nowadays, most people claim that protection the environment is the responsibility of governments. However, other persons disagree with them and say that it is stupid to believe that administration must preserve our beautiful and wonderful planet.

To my mind, it is considerable to protect the Earth by ministers. Firstly, admin has executive branch and therefore their significant goal is to defend our worthless milieu. Undoubtedly, cabinet has to speak in support of all spheres of life. Protection the atmosphere is no exception. Secondly, administration advocate people and their lifes while ministers stand by environment because the atmosphere and persons' health is interconnected substantially and for a full due.

There is an opposing opinion.

Some people state that admin must not uphold the milieu. Government deals with political, economic, social and spiritual issues. According ministers do not have time to maintain environment. Also, administration think that ordinary people ought to shield the atmosphere, because it is their responsibility to nature. Moreover, my opponents sure that admin must not protect environment, because nationals' soundness does not depend on the atmosphere.

Personally, I do not agree with the above opinion. I am convinced that it is unfair that government to shift its duties to citizens, because average people are unable to deal with complex environmental problems. In addition, if admin does not guard the milieu, the ministers ruin the lustiness of patrials, do not keep their interests and consequently the poor environmental conditions prevent people to walking in nature.

In conclusion, I believe that cabinet must protect the atmosphere. This way admin get great people' approval and overcome the environmental problems.

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Ê ñîæàëåíèþ, êîììóíèêàòèâíàÿ çàäà÷à ðåøåíà íåóäîâëåòâîðèòåëüíî, è çà âñ¸ ñî÷èíåíèå ïðèõîäèòñÿ âûñòàâèòü íîëü áàëëîâ. Êðàòêî ïåðå÷èñëþ îñíîâíûå íåäî÷¸òû, êîòîðûå ïðèâåëè ê âûñòàâëåíèþ íóëåâîãî áàëëà:

1)  ïåðâîì àáçàöå íå÷¸òêî ñôîðìóëèðîâàíî ïðîòèâîïîñòàâëåíèå äâóõ òî÷åê çðåíèÿ, ïîñêîëüêó âî âòîðîì ïðåäëîæåíèè íå ãîâîðèòñÿ íè îá îòñóòñòâèè îáÿçàííîñòè ïî çàùèòå îêðóæàþùåé ñðåäû ó ïðàâèòåëüñòâà, íè î íàëè÷èè òàêîé îáÿçàííîñòè ó ãðàæäàí. Âìåñòî ýòîãî àêöåíò ñìåùàåòñÿ íà ãëóïîñòü ïðèïèñûâàíèÿ ïðàâèòåëüñòâó äîëãà ïî îõðàíå ïðèðîäû.

2)  ïîñëåäíåì àáçàöå â âûâîäå àâòîðà çâó÷èò ñëîâî «àòìîñôåðà», ò.å. ìû íàáëþäàåì ñóæåíèå òåìû è ôàêòè÷åñêè îòñòóïëåíèå îò íå¸.

3) Ñîäåðæàíèå îñòàëüíûõ ÷àñòåé ñî÷èíåíèÿ âîîáùå óëàâëèâàåòñÿ äîâîëüíî ñëàáî èç-çà îáèëèÿ ëåêñè÷åñêèõ è ãðàììàòè÷åñêèõ îøèáîê. Ê ïðèìåðó, íàðÿäó ñî ñëîâîì government àâòîð çà÷åì-òî èñïîëüçóåò ñëîâà administration, ministers è cabinet, âèäèìî, ñ÷èòàÿ âñå ÷åòûðå ñëîâà ñèíîíèìàìè, õîòÿ îíè òàêîâûìè íå ÿâëÿþòñÿ.  ðåçóëüòàòå âîçíèêàåò ñèòóàöèÿ, êîãäà ÷èòàòåëü ïûòàåòñÿ óâèäåòü çà ýòèìè íàèìåíîâàíèÿìè ñëîæíóþ ëîãèêó ïîñòðîåíèÿ äîêàçàòåëüñòâà, êîòîðîé ïîïðîñòó íåò. Êñòàòè, ñëîâî administration àâòîð ìíîãîêðàòíî ñîêðàùàåò äî admin, íàðóøàÿ ýòèì òðåáîâàíèÿ ê ñòèëþ èçëîæåíèÿ. Ñòðåìÿñü ïðîäåìîíñòðèðîâàòü áîãàòñòâî ñëîâàðíîãî çàïàñà, àâòîð íà÷èíàåò èñïîëüçîâàòü ñëîâà è âûðàæåíèÿ, èçâåñòíûå äàæå íå êàæäîìó ïðåïîäàâàòåëþ, è, êîíå÷íî æå, äîïóñêàåò îøèáêè ïðè èõ èñïîëüçîâàíèè. Âîò ëèøü íåñêîëüêî ïðèìåðîâ ñòðàííûõ èëè âîâñå áåññìûñëåííûõ âûðàæåíèé: worthless milieu, uphold the milieu, nationals' soundness, guard the milieu, ministers ruin the lustiness of patrials.  ñîâîêóïíîñòè ñî ñëàáîé ãðàììàòèêîé âñå ýòè íåäî÷¸òû çàñëîíÿþò ñìûñë òåêñòà è äåëàþò åãî òðóäíûì äëÿ âîñïðèÿòèÿ.

Ðåêîìåíäàöèÿ äëÿ àâòîðà – ñíà÷àëà ïîñòðîèòü ñâÿçíûé è ëîãè÷íûé òåêñò íà ðóññêîì ÿçûêå, à çàòåì ñòàðàòüñÿ ïåðåâîäèòü åãî íà àíãëèéñêèé, ëèáî èñïîëüçóÿ ïðîñòûå ñëîâà è âûðàæåíèÿ èç ïàìÿòè, ëèáî ïðèìåíÿÿ ðóññêî-àíãëèéñêèé ñëîâàðü. Ñëîâàð¸ì ïðè ýòîì ñëåäóåò ïîëüçîâàòüñÿ âäóì÷èâî, à íå ïðîñòî âûïèñûâàòü ïåðâîå ïîïàâøååñÿ âðåäè âàðèàíòîâ ïåðåâîäà ñëîâî. Íåçíàêîìûå èëè ìàëîçíàêîìûå ñëîâà íåîáõîäèìî âñåãäà ïðîâåðÿòü íà ïðåäìåò òîãî, êàêîå èìåííî çíà÷åíèå îíè íåñóò è êàê «æèâóò» â ÿçûêå, ò.å. ñ êàêèìè äðóãèìè ñëîâàìè ìîãóò ñî÷åòàòüñÿ.

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