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What teens think about school uniform

📅 02.10.2022
Автор: Ekspert

This year I am doing a school project which aims at exploring what teenagers think about school uniform. In the Internet I have found a poll containing some relevant information, and now l and now I am going to analyse it and express my opinion.

I can highlight two main features of the statistics presented in the table. The most popular opinion about school uniform is enjoying to wear it (40%). The smallest persentage of those asked think that school uniform is outdated (9%).

The table shows that the number of teenagers who feel no conservative in wearing it is slightly more than the number of students who feel discomfort in wearing it. To my mind, there are many shops which make high quality school uniform. So it does not bring discomfort when wearing it.

It seems to me, statistics in the table reveals an important problem. Every school has a dress code and everyone should follow this rule. But there are those, who do not want to wear school uniform, because they think that it outdated, uncomfortable and so on. To solve this problem headteachers should organise meeting with students on which they created new school uniform, which is suitable for everyone.

To sum up my reasoning, I would like to say that uniform is an important part of school life, because it makes all the students one big team. Also, it helps concentrating on studying.

Исходный текст
1 Imagine that you are doing a project on what teenagers in Zetland think about school uniform. You have found some data on the subject?— the results of the opinion polls (see the table below).
Comment on the data in the table and give your opinion on the subject of the project.

Opinions about school uniform Number of teenagers (%)
Enjoying to wear it 40
Having to wear it 24
Feeling no concern in wearing it 14
Feeling discomfort wearing it 13
Regarding it as outdated 9

Write 200?250 words.
Use the following plan:
— make an opening statement on the subject of the project;
— select and report 2?3 facts;
— make 1?2 comparisons where relevant and give your comments;
— outline a problem one can face with wearing school uniform and suggest a way of solving it;
— conclude by giving and explaining your opinion on the role of school uniform for students.
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К2. Организация текста. Высказывание логично, средства логической связи использованы правильно, структура текста соответствует предложенному плану, текст правильно разделён на абзацы. (3 из 3)

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On the Internet

Неправильный предлог.

that it is outdated

Грамматическая ошибка.

should organise a meeting

Пропущен артикль.

created a new school uniform

Пропущен артикль.

К5. Орфографические ошибки практически отсутствуют. Текст разделён на предложения с правильным пунктуационным оформлением. В тексте имеется 1 орфографическая ошибка. (2 из 2)

The smallest percentage of those