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Extreme sports can build your character

📅 12.02.2021
Автор: Ekspert

Extreme sports is very popular today. There are a lot of people who are convienced that extreme sports can build your character, make you stronger and braver.

ut there are those who consider otherwise.

From my point of view, extreme sport is not the best way to become stronger, bolder and morally stable. Firstly, building your charcter such way you can get injuries or even die. As for me, it's the most stupid cause of death. Secondly, It's rather expensive doing extreme sports because spicial equipment and protective clothes isn't cheap. Finally, it's not for everybody. Some people are afraid of these kinds of sport and can get psychological scar or shock. It has bad influence on their health.

At the same time, many people are fond of extreme sports. They consider it can improve your human qualities and make you character stronger. The say extremly dangerous situations and overcoming fear inure to the benefit.

I'm afraid I don't agree with these view, because I repeat again I find it very hazardous. For example, Tim McNeill died in 2011 during competitions. He was famous motorcycle racer.

In conclusion, it's up to you whether to agree with me or not. Not all people prefer this way to build their charcter. There are other ones without putting your life at risk. For instanse, working on yourself, dicipline and ability to control your mind and desires.

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1.Вступление

There are a lot of people who are convienced that extreme sports can build your character, make you stronger and braver.

Автор не перефразировал тему. Аспект раскрыт не полностью.

2. Свое мнение

From my point of view, extreme sport is not the best way to become stronger, bolder and morally stable.

Автор рассуждает на другую тему. Речь шла только о возможности закалить характер, а не о том что экстремальные виды спорта не лучший способ это сделать.

4. Контраргумент

I find it very hazardous.

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5. Заключение

Not all people prefer this way to build their charcter. There are other ones without putting your life at risk. For instanse, working on yourself, dicipline and ability to control your mind and desires.

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