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40. One should read about historical sites before sightseeing (Ñî÷èíåíèÿ ÅÃÝ àíãëèéñêèé ÿçûê)

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Îöåíêà ýêñïåðòà âíèçó

Nowadays there are two points of view on the problem of need to find useful information about antique places before their visiting. Some people believe that it is a necessity to acquire some knowledges before the visiting the landmark while others do not think so.

In my point of view a small awareness before the trip to the landmark can be quite good for several reasons. First of all it helps a person to orientate in easier way during the excursion or study of the place and to fell a confidence along the trip.

Secondly, if someone knows the extended information about something, it will help he or her to ask a proper question in order to get a deeper knowledge about the site. And thirdly, there is a chance to get a bad interpreter or guide who can not report the information to the the tourists well.

Nevertheless, some people do not agree with this position. Firstly, not everyone likes spoilers, there are people who prefer to be intrigued before or exiting after the visiting site and, moreover, there are a lot of false information about the sites, that is why it is better to see everything by own eyes.

However I disagree with such opinion because firstly a person can read only interesting facts where there is just some helpful information and no spoiler. Secondly, it is obviously that it is important to use verified sources to get true knowledges.

All in all I can say, that it is up to the person to decide whether to study information before the sightseeing or not but I am hilly sure that the best way to prepare for the new knowledge is to find something new before.

Îáíîâëåíî:
Îïóáëèêîâàë(à):
Îöåíêà ýêñïåðòà:

Ê1– 2 áàëëà

 ýññå åñòü íåîáõîäèìîå êîëè÷åñòâî ñëîâ, ìîæíî ïðîâåðÿòü ðàáîòó.

 ïåðâîì àáçàöå ïåðåôðàçèðîâàíà ïðîáëåìà, îáîçíà÷åíû äâå òî÷êè çðåíèÿ, ïðè ýòîì êðàòêî ðàñêðûòà òîëüêî ïåðâàÿ òî÷êà çðåíèÿ, âòîðàÿ îñòàåòñÿ ïðîñòî óïîìÿíóòîé.

«First of all it helps a person to orientate in easier way during the excursion or study of the place and to fell a confidence along the trip»
–çäåñü íóæíî ÷óòü ïîáîëüøå ðàñêðûòü ìûñëü, óêàçàòü íà òî ÷òî äàåò ÷åëîâåêó ñïîñîáíîñòü ëó÷øå îðèåíòèðîâàòüñÿ â äîñòîïðèìå÷àòåëüíîñòè.

Ñ âòîðûì àðãóìåíòîì âñå â ïîðÿäêå, òðåòèé ìîæíî áûëî îáúåäèíèòü ñ ïåðâûì, ïîòîìó ÷òî åñëè ÷åëîâåê óçíàåò ïðåäâàðèòåëüíî áîëüøå î äîñòîïðèìå÷àòåëüíîñòè, òî ñàì íåïëîõî îðèåíòèðóåòñÿ, à çíà÷èò ãèäó íå óäàñòüñÿ çàêðåïèòü ó ÷åëîâåêà ëîæíóþ èíôîðìàöèþ.

«Firstly, not everyone likes spoilers, there are people who prefer to be intrigued before or exiting after the visiting site and, moreover, there are a lot of false information about the sites, that is why it is better to see everything by own eyes»
–ïðîòèâîïîëîæíóþ òî÷êó çðåíèÿ ìîæíî íåìíîãî íàïîëíèòü äîïîëíèòü, çàêîí÷èâ êàæäóþ èç ìûñëåé: â ïåðâîì ñëó÷àå íóæíî óêàçàòü, ÷òî ÷åëîâåê ðàñêðûâàåò ñâîþ èíòðèãó óâèäåâ òó ñàìóþ äîñòîïðèìå÷àòåëüíîñòü, âî âòîðîì ñëó÷àå, äîïèñàòü, ÷òî áîëåå ïðîâåðåííóþ èíôîðìàöèþ, à òàêæå ïîäëèííûé çðèòåëüíûé îáðàç ÷åëîâåê ìîæåò óâèäåòü òîëüêî â ðåàëüíîé æèçíè, íå èñïîëüçóÿ êàêèå-ëèáî ñàéòû, ïîýòîìó ïîñëåäíèå íå âñåãäà èìååò ñìûñë ïîñåùàòü, îñîáåííî òåì, äëÿ êîãî âàæíî ïåðâîå âïå÷àòëåíèå è ïðîâåðåííûå ñâåäåíèÿ.

Ñ êîíòðàðãóìåíòàìè âñ¸ â ïîðÿäêå.

Çàêëþ÷åíèå âåëèêîëåïíîå, âñå êðàòêî ðàñïèñàíî è îáîáùåíî.

Ê2– 3 áàëëà

Òåêñò íåîáû÷íî îðãàíèçîâàí, íå âñå àáçàöû ïîäåëåíû â ñîîòâåòñòâèè ñî ñìûñëîâîé îêðàñêîé.

Åñòü ëîãè÷åñêàÿ íåòî÷íîñòü:

«First of all it helps a person to orientate in easier way during the excursion or study of the place and to fell a confidence along the trip»
–çäåñü íóæíî ëîãè÷åñêîå çàêîí÷åííîñòü, âèäå óïîìèíàíèÿ î òîì, ÷òî, ïðî÷èòàâ ïîëåçíóþ èíôîðìàöèþ î äîñòîïðèìå÷àòåëüíîñòè, òóðèñò íà÷èíàåò ëó÷øå îðèåíòèðîâàòüñÿ êàê ïðîñòðàíñòâåííî, òàê è èíòåëëåêòóàëüíî, ýòî ïîìîãàåò åìó ëó÷øå îçíàêîìèòüñÿ ñ òîé ñàìûé äîñòîïðèìå÷àòåëüíîñòüþ.

«And thirdly, there is a chance to get a bad interpreter or guide who can not report the information to the the tourists well»
–ñòîèò óêàçàòü íà ðàçíîîáðàçèå ðåñóðñîâ è ìàòåðèàëîâ î äîñòîïðèìå÷àòåëüíîñòÿõ â ñîâðåìåííîì ìèðå, åñëè ÷åëîâåê óäåëÿåò âðåìÿ íà ïîèñê èíòåðåñíîé, íî ïîäòâåðæä¸ííîé èíôîðìàöèè, òî îáÿçàòåëüíî íàéäåò äëÿ ñåáÿ ÷òî-òî öåííîå, òîãäà îí íå áóäåò âîñïðèíèìàòü àáñîëþòíî âñå îò ãèäà, à âûäåëèò âàæíûå ìîìåíòû, ñòðóêòóðèðóåò âñå ó ñåáÿ â ãîëîâå.

Ê3–2 áàëëà

«spoilers»–âìåñòî ýòîãî ìîæíî íàïèñàòü–«óçíàâàíèå íàïåðåä âñåõ èíòåðåñíûõ ôàêòîâ», «ðàçðóøåíèå èíòðèãè». Ýòî äîëüøå, íî íå âñåãäà ýòî ñëîâî ìîæåò èñïîëüçîâàòüñÿ â çàäàíèÿõ ñ ôîðìàëüíîé ðå÷üþ.

Ê4– 0 áàëëîâ

Íåò àðòèêëÿ: «need to find», «in easier way».

Ëèøíèé ïðåäëîã: «fell a confidence».

Íåïðàâèëüíàÿ ôîðìà ãëàãîëà: «to fell», «there are a lot».

Íóæíî íàðå÷èå: «confidence along».

Íåïðàâèëüíî çàïèñàíî íàðå÷èå: «obviously».

Íåò ïðåäëîãà: «opinion because».

Íåïðàâèëüíàÿ ôîðìà: «he or her»–íóæíî ìåñòîèìåíèå.

Íóæíî åä.÷: «knowledges before», «true knowledges».

Ëèøíèé àðòèêëü: «the visiting the», «the the tourists well».

Ê5–1 áàëë

Ãåðóíäèé çäåñü íå íóæåí: «their visiting».

Íóæíà çàïÿòàÿ: «view a small», «First of all it», «However I disagree», «All in all I can».

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